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PostSubject: Writing Exercise   Sun Jan 23, 2011 3:35 pm

I'm going to write a sentence of me telling you something. I want you guys to show me not tell me what is going on. I'll have an example

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1. The old man was afraid of the dark

Showing

He pulled the covers up to his nose. The man had become paranoid in his old age when he went to bed. Every object in the room was in the shape of a glaring face. Every sound was someone lurking, waiting for him to be vulnerable. He could feel a presence although he was alone. Sleep was the only salvation.

Get it? Here are some you can try or make your own

1. The old man was afraid of the dark
2. The boy did anything to avoid the bully
3. She observed people in the park
4. The mallworker was very frustrated

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PostSubject: Re: Writing Exercise   Mon Jan 24, 2011 6:17 pm

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He sauntered down the seemingly empty street, as had now become a daily routine. What should have been a pleasent stroll was no more than a recurring episodic nightmare. This was his side of the street, he dared not cross, he dared not even look, for he knew he would be there.
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PostSubject: Re: Writing Exercise   Mon Jan 24, 2011 7:05 pm

Much work. Dark no like.
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PostSubject: Re: Writing Exercise   Mon Jan 24, 2011 7:07 pm

Nice one Shady

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